RSS Feed

Economy

It is that delicate line we as poets walk- what we have to say versus what we need to say (somewhat similar to leaving well enough alone). Sometimes we get lost in our own words, tripping over ourselves in the process. That’s what revision and editing are for. There is no better poem than a neat, concise work that evokes that feeling in readers making them want to read the piece over and over again, often times deriving new meaning from the subtleties of the poem.

This is one of my favorite poems I’ve written.  I’m happy with how “tight” it turned out.  It was originally published at the site below.

 

Small World
 
  

She typed furiously
On her laptop,
Excessively
Straight-laced
And homely.
Her tan loafers
Firmly planted
On the carpet
Indicated
She never had sex.
She captivated me
Nonetheless.
I wondered what she
Was writing
So hard,
And thought
Maybe
She was a poet too,
And if so,
Would she rather dine
With Rumi,
Or Bukowski,
Or maybe Plath?
She paused for a moment
Holding her bangs
Between her fingers,
And I thought Plath.
Definitely Plath.

http://chickasawplum.homestead.com/files/poetry/archive_09/07_09.html

Advertisements

About Daniel Romo

Author of When Kerosene's Involved (Mojave River Press, 2014) and Romancing Gravity (Silver Birch Press, 2013). I'm partial to prose poems. Alliteration. And fragments.

2 responses »

  1. hey man i can relate to this one. I also wonder what worlds people occupy while they’re concentrating on their lap tops in coffee shops.

    Reply
    • I know, right? I love it when they sit so close to the stage at open mics with their earphones on. Guess Borders or any other quiet place doesn’t suit their needs.

      Reply

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: